This one is inspired (style wise) by Coconuts' poem, Vibrant spirit.
The secrets a young boy kept
Clenched fist,
Scared boy,
Hateful words,
Mother's toy,
Smacked head,
Ringing ears,
Enraged mother,
Child's tears,
Sought affection,
Despised again,
Wanted love,
Received pain,
Unsafe home,
Fear abounds,
Mother's angry,
Banging sounds,
Heart races,
Flinch, cower,
Tears fall,
Misused power,
Hair pulled,
Twisted ears,
Smacked head,
Many tears,
Her struggles,
No excuse,
My suffering,
Child abuse.
The secrets a young boy kept
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The secrets a young boy kept
A little boy hides in an adult's disguise.
Quote taken from an original poem that I have written.
Quote taken from an original poem that I have written.
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Re: The secrets a young boy kept
So powerful. I could really hear, feel and see everything you were portraying. Great job.
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Re: The secrets a young boy kept
Thank you. It was a hard job writing that one. It was as if I went back in time recalling the feelings...
A little boy hides in an adult's disguise.
Quote taken from an original poem that I have written.
Quote taken from an original poem that I have written.
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Re: The secrets a young boy kept
Crow,
It has so much emotion in the graphic, honest telling.
It has so much emotion in the graphic, honest telling.
All women are beautiful. Period.
I deserve better than survival.
I deserve better than survival.
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Re: The secrets a young boy kept
Thank you there, I do appreciate your views. I nearly didn't post this one up on here... hard hitting and real. Just a small glimpse into the daily life of little Crow...
A little boy hides in an adult's disguise.
Quote taken from an original poem that I have written.
Quote taken from an original poem that I have written.
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Re: The secrets a young boy kept
So real so much emotion. Sometimes I like this style, straight emotion, flashed scenes like so many of our memories. It's clear the pain and betrayal
I wish I could rescue him and show him safety
Coconuts
I wish I could rescue him and show him safety
Coconuts
Be the Light in someone's night.